I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hi my name is Tyson and I go to Sockburn School. I really liked your slide show about Zach's life. It made me think about making my own life story. I think that you should put some more nouns in it next time.
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Nice writing Jaxon. I like Mach's Life Story. nice job on getting it done before Friday. Next time try be more focused.
ReplyDeleteNice Jaxon I like that you have full stops. I like that you have 3,2,1. I think you should add a video of space chimp but I really like your story.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Tyson and I go to Sockburn School. I really liked your slide show about Zach's life.
ReplyDeleteIt made me think about making my own life story. I think that you should put some more nouns in it next time.
Thanks for the Feedback Tyson!
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