My Mid Year Learning Goals

Song Lyrics

W.A.L.T: Listen to 2 song and write the similes and metaphor's copy and paste them onto a mind mup.

The Calfs Unlucky Day

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

My Facts About Mountain Gorillas

My Story

Term 2 Week 3

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel.

The words in red are my improvements

Second Draft

The Calf's Unlucky Day

It was a lovely day in the African Savannah.   I was just chilling because we got bored with my herd. I was the smallest in the herd because I am just a calf after all ,  The head of my herd is my uncle so I feel protected with him.  It is early July just about my one year birthday,  Don Don Don…

My herd and I were walking on the river bank eating some grass.I smell fear in  the air.  I heard my uncle shout run for your live so we did  as I could see a pride of lions They chased after me and  I was tackled into the river bad luck.   

My heart was beating 160 mph it felt like was going to explode  All of a sudden a Crocodile on me No I shouted.  This is not the birthday I was hoping for.  I feel like a rope being used in a game of tug a war  I was a rope between a Crocodile and a Pride of Lions in tuggawar.   But the 2 Buffaloes went and got the whole herd and scared away the lions and I have been rescued yay I thought I was going to die.  I said I didn't want my birthday to be the day I die.

Now I am safe Thanks to my family/Herd now we went home and had some fish, chips and all my crying has paid off hopefully I don't have to face them again in my life , or it happens to my calf in a few years time and we lived happily ever after.