I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
This is an interesting interpretation of the video 'Behind the Lines', Jaxon. Our focus was to show the audience what you were feeling not tell them. You need to think about all of the senses and how you could have used them to describe what was happening to you. It is really important that you listen to your story as you have missed out a lot of punctuation and some parts do not make sense. Please RW this and make changes.
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This is an interesting interpretation of the video 'Behind the Lines', Jaxon. Our focus was to show the audience what you were feeling not tell them. You need to think about all of the senses and how you could have used them to describe what was happening to you. It is really important that you listen to your story as you have missed out a lot of punctuation and some parts do not make sense. Please RW this and make changes.
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