Term 2 Week 3
W.A.L.T recall events through the eyes of an animal.
Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when my recount has a
Title
Orientation: When? Who? Where? Why?
Sequence of events: What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
Personal Comment: How did the events make you feel.
The words in red are my improvements
Second Draft
The Calf's Unlucky Day
It was a lovely day in the African Savannah. I was just chilling because we got bored with my herd. I was the smallest in the herd because I am just a calf after all , The head of my herd is my uncle so I feel protected with him. It is early July just about my one year birthday, Don Don Don…
My herd and I were walking on the river bank eating some grass.I smell fear in the air. I heard my uncle shout run for your live so we did as I could see a pride of lions They chased after me and I was tackled into the river bad luck.
My heart was beating 160 mph it felt like was going to explode All of a sudden a Crocodile on me No I shouted. This is not the birthday I was hoping for. I feel like a rope being used in a game of tug a war I was a rope between a Crocodile and a Pride of Lions in tuggawar. But the 2 Buffaloes went and got the whole herd and scared away the lions and I have been rescued yay I thought I was going to die. I said I didn't want my birthday to be the day I die.
Now I am safe Thanks to my family/Herd now we went home and had some fish, chips and all my crying has paid off hopefully I don't have to face them again in my life , or it happens to my calf in a few years time and we lived happily ever after.